Hi Brandon, I think this elevator pitch is great! Your opening line about salsa really made me interested because it made me ask "where is he going with this?" Also, your confidence and body language really showcased how strongly you believe in your idea. If I had to critique this pitch, I would suggest that you include a short bit of information about yourself and your qualifications. I think that would check all of the boxes.
Hey! I actually remember watching your first elevator pitch and this was definitely a significant improvement! Making your pitch to be 90 seconds really helped you add in a lot of valuable information that drew in your audience! All of your claims were very logical (population growing so food needs also need to grow) I think the information in this pitch was near flawless. I think the only critique I would have would be to switch the order of your part where you mention Gainesville and expanding, and your space camp lab experience at UF. It would be a better flow of information explaining why you would start at Gainesville. So it would be: "I work at UF, which is why I would start in Gainesville", instead of "lets start in Gainesville and then expand, because I work at UF". You would be explaining your experience with agriculture at UF thus the reason why you would start in Gainesville (because it is near your current resources) and that your experience at UF makes you confident that you will be able to expand to other locations. So do not change the wording, just the order! (50sec-1:13) I hope that makes sense!
Hi Brandon, I think this elevator pitch is great! Your opening line about salsa really made me interested because it made me ask "where is he going with this?" Also, your confidence and body language really showcased how strongly you believe in your idea. If I had to critique this pitch, I would suggest that you include a short bit of information about yourself and your qualifications. I think that would check all of the boxes.
ReplyDeleteHey! I actually remember watching your first elevator pitch and this was definitely a significant improvement! Making your pitch to be 90 seconds really helped you add in a lot of valuable information that drew in your audience! All of your claims were very logical (population growing so food needs also need to grow) I think the information in this pitch was near flawless. I think the only critique I would have would be to switch the order of your part where you mention Gainesville and expanding, and your space camp lab experience at UF. It would be a better flow of information explaining why you would start at Gainesville. So it would be: "I work at UF, which is why I would start in Gainesville", instead of "lets start in Gainesville and then expand, because I work at UF". You would be explaining your experience with agriculture at UF thus the reason why you would start in Gainesville (because it is near your current resources) and that your experience at UF makes you confident that you will be able to expand to other locations. So do not change the wording, just the order! (50sec-1:13) I hope that makes sense!
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